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Mommy, Daddy

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Mommy, Daddy, I think that I'm sick.
Mommy, Daddy, I think there's something wrong with my eyes.
Mommy, Daddy, is this a trick?
Because I'm having trouble distinguishing the truth from the lies.
I heard this as I was going to sleep last night. In my head. It was really weird. So....yeah....Not much, but I had to write it down.
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CalixLove's avatar
It's a very nice short piece, and I could attribute a lot to it myself. One thing that I, if I were the writer, would change, is 'distinguishing.' To my mouth, it interrupts the flow of the whole line. Maybe 'picking' or 'telling' would work better? Eh, you don't need to listen to me. Just my little word of advice. :)